
She stared wistfully at the slightly dusty glass window. Yes, she thought, that's where. She read off her mental note - crisps, chocolate sticks, Hershey's strawberry syrup, a couple of cartons of mixed fruit juices. The youngest she remembered had asked timidly for candy floss. She smiled inwardly. Candy.
She lingered at the glass window checking the display. Perhaps they would like one of these. The cuppy cake looked particularly inviting.Five of those, she added with maternal pleasure to her inventory. But she had to tackle the apparel window first. That way everything would be fresh. They'd melt within seconds, those chocolates.
The dress was important. Her snow maiden's birthday next week. She'd have to be extra careful with her choice. Her chapped grey lips cracked into a smile imagining the the tantrums that would follow otherwise.She would have to order the cake too. She tried to picture the cake. A doll house perhaps. Chocolate icing smudged generously all over and candy sticks for windows. That would be pretty.
She stood there, tottering on her feet, gazing into the distance relishing the cake already. Something nudged her sharply on her side and she stumbled onto the paved parking lot littered with empty cuppy cake cups. Oh sorry, I didn't notice. A voice that probably didn't notice anything but mirrors.
She thrust her palm forward - every line of fate etched in clear black ink, stubby curved nails - clinging on to life. Sorry, no change. The voice trailed away behind the glass of cuppy cakes and Hershey's strawberry syrup.
Something fell on her lap. Someone had discarded a lump of unwanted candy.
HP said...
wwoooowwwwww !!u'r superb! i'm proud of u for writing such brilliant stuff! :D :D
November 8, 2008 9:46 PM
lukkydivz said...
beauty farah, nobody could have described it better.
the pic takes all the empathy
November 8, 2008 9:48 PM
lukkydivz said...
btw.. y no title? :P
November 8, 2008 9:49 PM
Think Tank said...
@hp thnx ...lets show those cat examiners now :)
@divya ..i forget ...i've put it up now
November 8, 2008 10:00 PM
Abhinav said...
brilliant!!!!!!
first few lines were very very tempting!!!
November 8, 2008 10:07 PM
Think Tank said...
@abhinav ...glutton
November 8, 2008 10:12 PM
Bhai with Chai said...
oh..
why did it have to be sad..?
:((
powerful stuff! honestly
November 8, 2008 10:41 PM
Shrav said...
the writing is really exceptional:)
November 8, 2008 11:33 PM
♪♪HARINI♪♪ said...
hey.. first time im coming here and i liked ur blog a lot..
and the post was amazing. sad true, but very beautifully written.. am blogrolling you.
November 9, 2008 1:00 AM
Priya Joyce said...
very very touching..ahhh! touched the depths of ma heart....
this is the crude truth..fiction..after all is based on some truth...and this one..no words..to type in..
November 9, 2008 1:02 AM
Sarath said...
amazing climax.. brilliant stuff again..
November 9, 2008 1:28 AM
deluded said...
oh. my. god. ^^^^^
November 9, 2008 10:14 AM
Arti Honrao said...
A sensitive issue well handled!
Keep it up
GBU
Arti
November 9, 2008 1:06 PM
Keshi said...
OMG I cried!
Keshi.
November 9, 2008 3:52 PM
joiedevivre said...
hav nothin better to say..
its better to read it again i think.
November 9, 2008 10:46 PM
santoshi said...
hi this is my first visit and i am really impressed by your writting. I love your avatar image.
November 10, 2008 12:01 AM
Trinaa said...
heartwrenching :'(
beautifully written..loved every word of it...way to go babes!! muaaaaaaah :)))))
November 10, 2008 1:27 AM
Think Tank said...
@bhai ..i don't know myself ... evry thing i write ends up sad
@shrav thanx dude
November 10, 2008 1:34 AM
Think Tank said...
@ harini thanx :)
@sarath thanx :)
November 10, 2008 1:38 AM
Think Tank said...
@pri sad sad truth pri
@deluded ..u forgot this : :O
November 10, 2008 1:42 AM
Think Tank said...
@arti thanx
@kesgi ..sweetheart u had already cried too much ...don't cry nemore
November 10, 2008 1:43 AM
Think Tank said...
@neha go go and if u understand explain it to me also ;)
@santoshi thanx
November 10, 2008 1:44 AM
Think Tank said...
@tinni ..ya aftr d way u write i guess its only proper kindness to spare some nice words for us
November 10, 2008 1:46 AM
CяŷştąŁ said...
This was awesome!
Too good..the pic really adds on to the whole effect!
BrillianT!
The harsh truth..what a potrait!
=)
November 10, 2008 2:08 AM
tinkerbell said...
every post seems better than the last.. this one reminds me of "the lil princess" :(.. loved it farro.. more than loved the expression..
November 10, 2008 3:12 AM
Shwetz said...
omg, that was so brilliantly written. You've handled that little gurl so very well. It feels u have merged the character with u.
Keep writing gurl.
November 10, 2008 5:00 AM
Stupidosaur said...
Do you intend to look for the footprints with a flashlight?
//Let There be Light
LOST FOOTPRINTS
November 10, 2008 7:20 AM
Lena said...
its really exceptional, you've got a lot of talent, girl!!
it is always a great pleasure to read you :)
November 10, 2008 9:34 AM
Alok said...
I've tried to think of something to comment about this twice, but nothing came up.
Well, poignant is surely the word. Especially the way it ends. But I looked forward for something more than just a basic emotional idea.
I liked this line:
"A voice that probably didn't notice anything but mirrors."
November 10, 2008 10:08 AM
•♥•♥[V]♥•♥• said...
use your talents
write a script..
November 10, 2008 1:25 PM
singlendacity89 said...
Farah! That was awesome!
I really enjoyed reading this..
Again, Awesome!!
Ne!
November 10, 2008 2:06 PM
Sach! said...
:-) Yeah! Farah actually rules ;) Loved reading this...made my day! 'nd am so so sorry for not visiting you for so long...
lost my blogroll :|
November 10, 2008 3:27 PM
digant sutar said...
very nice..
lovely written...
November 10, 2008 7:03 PM
Cinderella. said...
Amazing work Babe !!
Splendidly written !!!
Kudos to you for having come up with something like this...
November 10, 2008 10:17 PM
Cinderella. said...
I'm linking you..
:)
November 10, 2008 10:18 PM
rantravereflect/ jane said...
whoaaaa! stupendous babeeeee! like completely,,
we're all so often so carried away by our own materialistic pleasures that we dun even care whatever is happening around us!
loved the ending..
icing on that choco icing budday cake!
November 11, 2008 4:33 AM
Mishra said...
Powerful... good to see someone making a point that concerns a bigger circle of people..
Guess, its the first time I am here.Will blogroll you for updates :)
Cheers
November 11, 2008 5:43 AM
santoshi said...
hi thanks for your suggestion. i have removed the word verification.
November 11, 2008 6:47 AM
Think Tank said...
@crystal thanx ayu ...u r a sweetheart
@isra how come u r able 2 access d net now?
November 11, 2008 7:52 AM
Think Tank said...
@swetz ... thanku ji
@stupidosaur ..flashlight se dikhegi?
November 11, 2008 7:53 AM
Think Tank said...
@lena thanx darling xxx
@alok ..oh gud ..u didn't write dum dum dum
November 11, 2008 7:54 AM
Think Tank said...
@vick ..oh my creativity does not extend to more than a couple of pages:(
@single thanx :)
November 11, 2008 7:56 AM
Think Tank said...
@sach no problemo .. i lost mine 2 ;)
@digant thnx
November 11, 2008 7:57 AM
•♥•♥[V]♥•♥• said...
you never know what you can do..
try dear
November 11, 2008 7:57 AM
Think Tank said...
@cindrella ..aha a kudos from d princess
@jane ..sweety plz update ur blog ..ages since i read it
November 11, 2008 7:58 AM
Think Tank said...
@mishra ..thanx dude :), blogrollin u 2
@santoshi :)
November 11, 2008 7:59 AM
deluded said...
can i have some candy too?
or cuppy cakes?
or an ipod?
November 11, 2008 8:09 AM
Alok said...
Augh, alright:
"We'd like a sizzling hottie,
Who'd Like to get naughty!
Do you know of a man,
Who'd help us rub some tan?"
"Uh, did you try the village?"
Dum Dum Dum Dum...
November 11, 2008 9:00 AM
Nidhi said...
This is my first visit to your blog..
All I can say is you write amazingly well and this post of yours made me cry...
November 12, 2008 10:17 PM
Ayushi said...
Excellent descriptions...posing ‘reality’...
There are two things: art/emotions and philosophy/science. I call a piece inspiring if these two match.All other forms of art-to me-are of little inspiritation/utility/interest.
Your art does not appreciate natural design.Thats why I called ur last post wicked too...hehhe... Everything that may not be pleasant might be true and rational(nature’s view).We work our way to that pleasantness...Thats how we survive.
I think its beautiful that way, if it were not, the ways would have changed or would be changing, but I se a set stagnation in such patterns... The greatest universal truth about humanity is that each individual retains complete sovereignty in deciding to live in happiness and peace or to live in death (the living death)
November 14, 2008 11:25 AM
*~*{Sameera}*~* said...
My heart went out to the li'l girl.Makes me feel guilty for having grown up with my every wish being fulfilled...
November 24, 2008 5:23 AM