It was black as the pits of hell. Blacker than blackness. Blacker than the absoluteness of a black hole. Not the distantest ray of illumination touched here. Nothing. But it was bulging. Too heavy for the emptiness of the dark.
Her fingers led her blindly against the expansive walls wending their way through the cramped storage. Limbs, sockets, entrails wrapped carelessly in smooth notes, once crisp and green. Sealed with cold unyielding metal. She dropped down on her knees, on warm, slightly wet and unformly lumps. Her nails scraped against damp, limp paper, tearing apart the pieces, feeling through the contents, one by one, carefully, as if waiting for a revelation. The package gave away. A gift from hell. The seal fell in a dull 'thuck' and millions of slimy balls ambled down listlessly. She reached out a gingery finger and touched one. The ball spun, dispelling the darkness for terrifying light.
The silence split. A numb dread crept under the thin peel of her skin like a parasite. The stench of death choked her throat, burning her insides. Glutinous red. Everywhere. Pools. Puddles. Oceans. Limbs scattered like dry leaves from a dead tree. Siren- screams; toneless.Insignificant centipedes thrashing futilely against fate. Against fate scribed by humans in blood. Where doom is the only word.
Wide eyes. Fear. Surprise. Who knows. Too disfigured to make out. Lip hung loose. Blue. A one-fingered tiny hand stretched out in call.
She staggered. Her hand crept towards it. No movement. "Come", she whispered hoarsely, "Come to Ma". The finger curled round hers.
"Shock", said the doctor tonelessly. And they carried her away.
PS: Friends and blogmaniacs. I'm really sorry but i ate up by surfing limit again. I know you are rolling your eyes but really i don't know what happened. Anybody have any idea to help this damsel in distress? This is my last post for this month :(. And whats worse i won't be able to visit your blogs:(:(:(. I'm sorry. Two messages however: Crystal thanku you so much for that awesome award ..will add it next month. Digant, i'm sorry i couldn't visit your blog, i'll do that next month too. Hasta La Vista.
vatsal said...
goosebumps!....i really got scared...:-)..thanks for visiting my blog! and congrats for your awards..take care.
October 16, 2008 10:53 PM
Chaggoholic.... said...
Well scary and a bit OHT (Overhead Transmission) for me;) Well kp writin hope to c u back soon....
October 17, 2008 2:20 AM
Trinaa said...
aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaarghhh!! awesome behna... :O :O :O
..n u ate up ur limit AGAIN?? how?!!
October 17, 2008 2:36 AM
Chriz said...
i dint get an intimation from blogger abt ur latest post.. sad that u consumed all the net hours.. empty ur net tummy and get back soon..
October 17, 2008 11:58 PM
Lena said...
ohhh that was indeed scary, you've got a lot of talent because thats not simple to convey not only the mesage but also the feelings to the reader :)
October 18, 2008 6:45 AM
joiedevivre said...
madem aapne hame daara diya..
October 18, 2008 7:54 AM
Think Tank said...
no 1 i've decided to try my luck ..pushing beyond my surfing limit ...
October 18, 2008 8:06 AM
Think Tank said...
@vatsal..thanku ji
@ choggaholic..nvr mind ..for me too
@ tinni ..seriously i dunno
@chriz i'll murder whoever riuns blogger
@lena hey thanx
@joie ..i mant too ..thanks for being scared
October 18, 2008 8:09 AM
HP said...
"Wide eyes. Fear. Surprise. Who knows."
mind blowing !!!
October 18, 2008 9:37 AM
•♥•♥[V]♥•♥• said...
that was good.
Loved it yaar..totally.
i sank deep into it.
take care dear
;)
October 18, 2008 12:49 PM
Ayushi said...
I don't know why, but I felt as if my breath was being sucked out of me while I read this! The description did its work very well...
I think a last thought of something is also included in a shock or anything that results in unconsciousness...I thought that hand could not be the doctor's if this was thought by her mind...but it had to represent a vision of some reality snapped in random life... :)
Very good work... :)
October 18, 2008 11:42 PM
Sach! said...
Aww you scared me ;)
Great going...
October 18, 2008 11:54 PM
¢яŷştąŁ said...
WOOOOWWIEEEEEE..I got scared..sorta! :O
Man..you're tooo good.
October 19, 2008 1:22 AM
CALM B4 THE STORM said...
WOW! That was awesome! Yeah I was on the end of my seat reading this...
Take your time... but hurry up and come back! :)
ne
October 19, 2008 3:51 PM
Keshi said...
freaky!
hey take ur time girl...we can wait. :)
Keshi.
October 19, 2008 10:36 PM
Alok said...
Yikes. That was, uh, sinister.
But I still don't get it. Is this the description of a person who is about to get shock therapy or someone who's going through it?
*scratches head*
P.S. You ate your limit again!
Bwaaahahahhhahah
October 20, 2008 9:31 AM
Swati said...
sab log nachon ko darane mein kyun lage hain?? :O
whatever happened to happy thought?? :P
but seriously..was real good! :D
October 20, 2008 5:37 PM
Swati said...
*bachon
October 20, 2008 5:37 PM
How do we know said...
you ate up ur net hours.. AGAIN?!!!
Look forward to meeting u in November.. cant u buy some more net hours this month?
October 21, 2008 2:22 AM
Solitaire said...
What a way to leave this month!!
This was great!
Come back soon!
October 21, 2008 9:41 PM
Chriz said...
am scared of you now
October 22, 2008 8:46 PM
CяŷştąŁ said...
Why've you disappeared from Blogger fr so long? :(
Missing yr stories!
October 25, 2008 2:08 AM
tinkerbell said...
hey farro
a piece of brilliance just again..`
luv u sweethrt.. missin u.. n u know wt.. "I wnt 2 get BACK!!"
October 30, 2008 12:11 AM
CяŷştąŁ said...
Have you forgotten that you have a blog to update?
October 30, 2008 5:35 AM
Think Tank said...
@crystal ..not forgotten darling..will post tomorrow :)
October 30, 2008 9:23 PM
Keshi said...
Hope all is well with ya :)
TC hun!
Keshi.
October 30, 2008 10:02 PM
Lash said...
you write really well.
October 31, 2008 4:18 AM
lukkydivz said...
oh my! i missed this post :O i guess i was disconnected from the internet when u posted this :(
how hav u been?
October 31, 2008 4:22 AM
The Phosgene Kid said...
Sounds as though you were in my garage.
You have Internet rationing where you live???
October 31, 2008 9:32 AM
Think Tank said...
@divya..ok apart from missing the net
@phosgene...nah not rationing xactly its just that they charge a fixd 250 for upto 1gb surfing ...after that u r charged per mb n my mum wudnt be happy payimg xtra phone bills
October 31, 2008 9:43 PM
Stupidosaur said...
She is in shock or is she being given shock therapy or death penalty be shock?
Mujhey kuchh nahin samjha!
In the beginning I thought it was the script for the initial part of movie Black, with you repeating Black Black everywhere, and 'she' feeling everything with her fingers.
Then I got totally lost with the 'gift from hell' and slimy balls and whatnot.
Then with all the bloody gory stuff of next para, I wondered if 'she' is mad, or is being tortured? Battered too, going by the blue lip.
//Against fate scribed by humans in blood. Where doom is the only word.
death sentence or what? death by shock at the end of torture? Whose hand is it with the finger then? Who is ma?
Or is it some nurse (Ma) taking the deranged tortured soul (who has also self inflicted wounds)for shock therapy?
Again "And they carried her away." seems to have the finality of death, a notion further strenghthened by the post label.
So what is it that you are actually describing? I am so damn confused!!!
And about the limit,
Maybe you could change your settings such that images are not downloaded be default, if the limit is reached because of excessive browsing.
Otherwise you could check various softwares and antivirus on your machine if they always keep autoupgrading themselves from the net. Then you could disable auto upgrades for a few.
BTW how much is this 'limit' that you keep finishing off :)?
Maybe you could opt for a greater limit?
November 3, 2008 6:20 AM
Sarath said...
scaarrrrryyyy....
sorry for commenting so late.. but didn't receive the notification for this post from blogger. Your greening it post is still being shown as the last one on my page
November 5, 2008 4:07 AM
*~*{Sameera}*~* said...
That was so thrilling!Very well written dear :)
November 24, 2008 5:19 AM